ANOTHER EASY 10 POINTS!!!?

your poem is good but you have to go and use words that expresses one whole sentence like using a word to describe half of your sentence and another to finish it. it was good but too long it was rhymed but somehow confusing and dont be conscious bout the time it will take you more time on it much better result i remember my first written poem it took me 5 min to write one and it took m 3min to edit it 4 times and it came out much better so just edit your poem change some words and connect some lines together and delete some it would sound much better and it would feel more emotional